“The Fallen Angel”
There’s a comet, and she’s Lucifer. I see what you did there.
Things Are Just Happening
Telling a good story isn’t easy. It requires a lot of forethought and planning, or a lot of rewriting to make it looked like you planned out what you really didn’t. Also, luck. What you can’t do is abuse your position as author. You can’t just make things happen, like the gods of old. We have a phrase for that: Deus ex machina. Lit: God from the machine. I don’t think I’m telling you anything new by saying that in modern storytelling, the deus ex machina is heavily frowned upon.
If you would like to know how to not tell a story, Comet Lucifer once again shows the way, by pulling almost everything that happens out of its ass this episode.
Moura transforms into her human form because … because she did. She doesn’t know, it’s never said, it just happens. Vee shows up and starts pulling shotguns out of bread and throwing melonpan bombs because of her regret over Do Mon, sure—but why does she have any of these weapons? And why the hell are they in bread? We’re probably better off not knowing.
Captain Gus and co showing up to save Sougo was foreshadowed, this is true, but it was so damn bad—expected, contrived, and out of character … why does he suddenly care about this asshole kid again?—that it was somehow even worse. And then Anatolia (Muranaka Tomo), whose name has never been revealed until this episode, suddenly kills Zoneboyle and becomes the Big Bad (trope trope trope, aaaaand I called it), even though we don’t know a damn thing about her. And there’s also a fucking comet heading for the planet. Ugh. Just ugh.
What’s Being Done Right
Not much. Sougo is still an idiot who is incapable of thinking of a plan other than “Run to where Felia is” and “Hit things with a metal pipe,” plus everything I said above. They also snuffed out Zoneboyle, who could have been a somewhat interesting villain since he’s not cacklingly evil—except for that first scene, wher he did cackle, because we can’t have a scene go by without some bad writing—in favor of the much more clearly evil secretary. But, er, at least she’s a kickass woman who can mix it up in a brawl and also has boobies and stuff, right?
I’m going to be serious here. I’ve got nothing. She’s moderately more interesting than Zoneboyle was as a character (going by her specs—transformer, changes into a mech, etc), though no more interesting in personality. Everything else is bad, including how the antagonists blow up instantly while even Roman’s mech can take a shot. There is no hope left. Everything is bad. Zetsubou! Zetsuboushita
But on the plus side, Sougo can now channel his inner Charlie Brown when he gets Felia back. After all, he’ll have a rock. And will have starred in a show that sunk like one. Zam!
tl;dr: @StiltsOutLoud – There’s a comet, and she’s Lucifer. I see what you did there. …is it bad if I’m rooting for the comet? #cometlucifer 11
- For some reason, no one else wanted to cover this show for me while I was out of town. I wonder why? *glances at the screen caps* …I’m going back to drinking.
- Just kill him already, dammit.
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